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My name is Lorn Halcorr and I serve the new empire, The Imperial Consortium. I am a Commander for the navy and I’ve been lucky enough to have been invited over to take up a high-end position on Project Orisa. I have worked from the ground up to get where I am today and I have no intention of letting any other factions get in the way of that, especially not the New Republic. Under project Orisa’s watch they will fall. This will be their power against ours and I’m willing to bet that I know who will come out on top. This is just the beginning and for however long this project takes, I will see it through that it is executed and so are our enemies.
“This is a classified area, I’m gonna need to see some identification.” I’m expecting to be questioned about arriving here. While I may be one of the front men this is a very new appointment and word hasn’t quite spread across the Consortium as quickly as I would have liked.
“I am commander Halcorr and I am the leader of this project here on Endor. You will be receiving a lot more visits from me and my team as time goes on, but I respect that you are tight with security, it makes me feel better knowing I have such brilliant troopers on the outside of my facility.”
“Thank you sir, I apologise for not recognising you, but as you may well know, the New Republic disrupts many of our communications, so being told face to face is now quicker than any comm message.”
“I understand, having to suffer under their power has been a struggle for us all, let us hope that project Orisa can begin to restore us to our rightful place.” He waved us through and off we went to see what Dr Mabot had been working on.
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This topic was modified 2 years ago by Darth Bjorn
Posted : 01/11/2022 9:00 pm
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This is a really good entry, with some great structure techniques. You could improve composition a little by having the open space closest to the camera - that allows you to get more focus on what's going on. Another improvement could be working with your Moc from a purpose pov; What are we looking at? It's easy to just do an entrance to an Imperial facility, but is there anything that makes it unique, and gives away, what it is?
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Posted : 19/11/2022 1:15 pm
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GM / Faction Leader of ARGO Industries
Posted : 19/11/2022 1:15 pm
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@darth-bjorn Thanks a lot, I'll definitely try to focus on some of these in later vignettes! Composition is definitely something I need to work on, perhaps planning out the build a little more before starting it would do me some good.
Posted : 30/12/2022 12:15 am
